I have a famliy. They are my father,my mother and me. My father is a doctor. He goes to work by bus. My mother is a factory worker. She goes to work by bike.I am a student.I go to school on foot.
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I have a happy famliy. There are three people in my family. They are my father, my mother and me. My father is a doctor. He goes to work by bus. My mother is a factory worker. She goes to work by bike. I am a student. I go to school on foot. I love my family.修改教師： Crystal老師六年級:靜純