Spring is when life's alive in everything.I went to xiangshan park with my mather yesterday.T-he air is very clean and the sunshine is very warm.
The xiangshan park have apieceof grass.l like lying on the ground of the park in spring.The grass is very soft,andI love the feeling of lying on the grass.And,I enjoy lying of the grass und-er the sun.
The park have many peach blossoms,too.Chinese poets often compare beautiful women to peach blo-ssoms in spring. Thewarm quick rains and sudden frothing of pink peach blossoms and dogwood dappl-ing with white stars the dark river swamp and far-off hills.So,these peach blossoms were very beautiful. Under the big tree, I fed the birdswith a happy mood.The birds were verylovely,and I very li-ke them. Yestreday,I have a good time.What a good day!
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Spring is coming and everything begins to come back to life. It's time for go outing.I went to Xiangshan park with my mother yesterday.The air was very clean. The sun shone brightly and it was very warm.
In spring, l like lying on the grass in the park. The grass was very soft, andI enjoyed the feeling of lying on the grass, especially under the sun.
All the flowers in the park were blooming beautifully. Trees turned green. I heard birds singing happily. We had a picnic there. And I rode a bike, too.
I had a good time there. What a good day!修改老師：Crystal 老師初二:陳婧涵